Lacie @ Hornby High School

Friday, 18 May 2018

the big bad wolfs.

The big bad wolf is quite obviously innocent because he did not mean to blow the house down or should I say snezee the house down. Here is why the wolf is Innocent…

I think the wolf was innocent because he accedentley sneeezed on the house. He blew the house down because he had a cold.

I think he is a nice wolf and he was just trying to get a cup of sugar for his grandmas caketo finish his cake but he could not hold his sneeze in. He could not help but sneeze. He was clearly inocent because he had asthma and a very

bad cold.

He is not a human so he could not go into the supermarket to get medacation. He was being thoughtful by not going into the shop as he didn’t want to make others sick. What a nice thoughtful wolf. How could you ever think he was guilty?

The wolf is definitelt innocent. There is no clear evidence to say he was guilty.

Here is Miss Johnstones comments

Add more detail here Lacie. On the first paragraph

think he is a nice wolf and he was just trying to get a cup of sugar for his grandmas caketo finish his cake but he could not hold his sneeze in. He could not help but sneeze. He was inocent because he had asthma and a very bad cold.

Great ideas in this paragraph. Add some persuasive language to make it more convincing. On the second paragraph

This paragraph doesn't make sense. Pick another idea from the ideas on the whiteboard third paragraph

in writing we are trying to convince miss johnstone to say the wolf is innocent.