My next steps in writing

Today in class we had a look at our scores from our writing test and then we had to look at a rubric with next steps for our stage we were at, we had to write the next steps on our blog.

For Ideas I can I have lots of ideas that connect to the topic with some extra information ,  Or One of my ideas links to the topic and has lots of information,or  Some of my ideas show complexity ( Have extra information,detail or facts that explain my thinking).

My next steps for ideas are Make my ideas original, So the reader can connect with them, Add extra information,detail or facts that explain my writing.

For Structure I can  make most of my writing match the text type or purpose.

My next steps for structure is  to try to match all parts of my writing to the text type.

For Organisation My Ideas are organised in basic paragraphs my Ideas flow but they dont have information to support them.

For Organisation my next steps are  to Link together sentences that match what is happening in my writing, Make heading visible for the reader.

For Punctuation I have used capital letters and full stops in the correct places and I am trying to use other punctuation like commas,questions marks and exclamation marks. 

My next steps for Punctuation is to use commas to show different parts of a sentence and add punctuation to create a mood and show better detail to make the readers want to read it. 

For vocabulary I can use lots of the words that I use when I talk or I am begging to use words that give the reader detailed information.

My next steps for vocabulary Try to keep the reader interested in what I am writing.

For sentence structure I can some of my sentences tell the reader what I want them to know. Some of my sentences are long,and some of my sentences are short.

For sentence structure my next steps are to make sure I choose the right sentence to show the reader what I want them to know , 

 Snowy Day

Today in class we got given a picture to write about we had to start by looking at the top left corner and write about what it was and make sure it was descriptive, Then we wrote about what it was in the top right corner and then we had to add what we saw in the bottom part of the picture. We had to add in a character I chose to add a dog to my story. Then we had to add what our character was doing. We also had to add a problem and then how the problem got fixed.

On a nice  night  it started snowing and it was landing in the trees. The house roof and windows got covered in the snow, The snow was still landing in the trees. There is another little house behind that looks like it is completely covered with snow. The snow was setting on the ground and all threw out the trees there was lots of snow. There was a dog stuck outside in the snow it was crying and shivering it must of been extremely cold.

The dog was a golden retriever her name was Ellie. She was an extremely careful dog she never hurt anyone. She was trying to get out of the snow that just randomly fell out of the sky that she did not notice was going to happen. She was moving backwards and forwards and side to side but she could not get out at all.

The  problem is that Ellie is stuck in the snow and can get out. She has tried by moving in different directions. She started yelping and barking to try to get her owners attention but she thinks that they could be asleep. The snow was freezing her little paws she could barley feel them they were going numb from all of the coldness.

The neighbour heard the dog barking and went outside to find out what was wrong, He saw the dog stuck in the snow.   He ran across the slippery snow nearly falling over a few times when he go there he lifted Ellie out of the snow and went on knocked on the door at her house they did not answer you could hear them snoring really loud. So he decided to take the dog to his house and he had the fire lit so she layed in front of it and went to sleep when she woke up  in the morning she returned back to her house. 

 Plans for in the summer holidays

Today in class I had to make a blog post about my plans for in the holidays if we had any plans.

In the holidays I am going to go to outdoor pools, Bus to Lyttelton and then walk to Diamond Harbour. We might be going to Dunedin, I am going to go swimming in Corsair Bay, I might go to Kaikoura in January like we were going to before the trains got cancelled because of the virus. 

On Christmas day I think that we are just going to stay home set up our pool go swimming and play outside on the trampoline and in the pool.We will probably get up at 7 am and open presents and then go outside at 7.30 and go swimming and then stay up all night watching movies. 

 How I feel about moving into year 9

Today in class we had to make a blog post about how we were feeling about the end of the year and becoming a new year level.

I am excited and nervous to become a year nine, I am excited because I can make new friends from the new people who join next year and I will have different teachers for different classes. I am nervous because I dont know who will be in my class and if I am moving classes or staying in the same class. 

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A Healthy Menu for a Week

Today in health we have been working on a set of slides we had to think of healthy food for a week for breakfast,lunch and dinner then we had to add a picture and post our slides on our blog.

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